Supdude And Orange
Ik din ranjha bola heer se
Kuch kisse tumhe sunane hai
Dstoor jo h mohabbat ke
Chahe kisse thode purane h
Ik parwana tha bhinbhinata hua
Andheri si raat thi
Khi duur mod pr tilmilati
Madham si thi roshni
Usi ko apna Sahara bna
Ik shama k drr aa khda
Uski hasiin chvi pr parwana hskr mukkamal ho pda
@supdude05112007 wow thats very good. Your grasp of words is awesome. And very relatable.
And also heer ranjha is one of my fav films
@Orange64 well would like to hear the explanation?
@supdude05112007 yes sure, i would love to
@Orange64 i am coming after some time , have to burn holi. You can write it and go if its late. I will read it for sure
@Orange64 so what inspired you to write on this topic, personal experience or other? (tell only if u want)
@Orange64 i just sort of write.. like i ve been writing for *** now 5-6 years , it takes me 5-10 mins to write a poem
@supdude05112007 wow great, i really like this
@Orange64 my inspiration can come from sort of anywhere
Like ese h ek saying hoti
Like a moth to a flame
Moth flame ki brightness ko dekhte dekhte apne aap ko flame m kho bethta.. isko Indian literature m as love ko drshane k liye use hota.. .
So parwana: moth shama:mombati ki flame
Yha moth basically ek bnda h jisme Andheri raat uski zindagi ka gnda time h , roshni hope jo vo dhundte dhundte like apna partner dhund bethta vo hope k sahare jeete jeete, jisko ab vo itna chahta ki uspr jaan bhi kurbaan krde
@supdude05112007 wow thats a wonderful logic and unfortunatly thats true. And generally till evn at age 30 brain is so immature that many people go inside this flame.
if you like you can also post it in poetry forum. its so good i am sure ppl who know hindi will like it
@Orange64 will try
@supdude05112007 nd if you write more in future please tag me , i am your fan now
@supdude05112007 hii dude. Haven't seen you from that day . How are you doing? Everything alright?
I spoke this at my nanus bhog , i tried to capture how my mom and mamu mausi are trying to process the grief remembering the old memories
Sanate m bhi ashaanti h , ajeeb sa h ye sma
Khaali sa vo bistr dekh
Mnn bda ghbra rha
lamhe the jo saath k
Vo kse yadein bngyi kl ki
Tsveeron m sirf kyu dikhrhe
Kya hogyi esi glti
Kya dubara nhi milegi godi
Ya kndhon pr nhi bithaoge?
Fr le chlo khi fr shehr m
Ab nye joote nhi dilaoge?
Fr sikhao sundr se likhna
Ya jeene ka andaaz
Kyu nhi kuch bolre
Kyu rkhe hue ye raaz?
Khi fr hva m uchalo
Aur pkdo apne haath mein
Na chinta jha na darr hai
Kyu hatt rhe ab mulakaat se
Fr lechlo vo dukaan mein
Aur dilvao na vo toffee
Ek anne ki 2 hai
Aur manga thodi kuch kafi
Fr lao na diwali pr ptakhe
Ya holi pr gulaal
Kyu daant nhi rhe ab glti pr
Ye khamoshi ki ksi dhaal
Fr sunao na kisse priyon k
Kya us duniya hi miloge ab?
Fr gungunao na chitrahaar pr
Ye shaant raag kb chodhoge ab?
Aajao na saamne hth chodhdo
Kyu krrhe ab sme brbaad
Dekho toh sb milne aaye hai
Jinko aap krte the yaad
@supdude05112007 I love it. I can totally feel it. I remember my grandma now
@Orange64 you write so much good and capture emotions
@Orange64 i deep dive into emltion and scenery while writing, it helps alot to be the character you are writing about
@supdude05112007 yess fr. Imagery is such a powerful tool. You really made a good image of him
@Orange64 no like imagery as in the scene or memory through the eyes of the one around which the poem is happening
@supdude05112007 I m talking about scenery and others
@Orange64 om shaanti🙏
@supdude05112007 om shaanti 🙏
@Orange64 how long ago was it though my paternal grandmother passed away when ibwas like 2 , i have no memories of her whatsoever, i regret that
@supdude05112007 oh I feel u. My paternal grandfather and maternal grandmother passed away when I was a child
@Orange64 hey not seen u recently u good?
@supdude05112007 yess yess i am good. I was not in city, went to my cousins house for 3-4 days. I will return in a day or two. Thanks fr for checking on me. Wbu? How are you? And how was jee? ( Only if you want to answer).
@Orange64 okay-ish *** wbu
@supdude05112007 samee samee .
Btw I m bk home today
@Orange64 oh nice have you applied for private colleges like vit or bitsat though?
@supdude05112007 no. U?
I have applied for manipal vellore but have no interest in going to south as being in punjab its really far away so my primary focus is bitsat right now
@supdude05112007 understood understood there is a lot of culture difference . Hope you get your desired place. Gl
You too