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User Profile: Dime9878
Dime9878 April 21st

Chocolate milk

It tests great

It felt great

To have one

But it does make a mess

Everywhere on my hands and shirt

All chocolate

To have to clean it all

To hide the tissues in a box

With others

Nobody will notice

The stains under all my clothes

But it feels so bad to drink a lot

It was never good for me

But it’s what I deserve

The euphoric feeling

I can’t stop now

I started it I have to continue on

It does flow like a river

So messy

So good

One last time

It doesn’t effect nobody

It only effects me

I deserve it

I deserve a Silver cup of chocolate milk

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Dime9878 OP April 21st

I feel like this poem is to abstract or to obvious or nonsense okay the inspiration was my struggle with SH and if you wander what is chocolate milk means okay when blood cells die it turns into the color brown and chocolate milk color is brown that what it means and that’s it

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User Profile: braveNest6406
braveNest6406 April 22nd

@Dime9878 thats such a good idea to use as a metaphor. The message is already there, but the idea that it correlates directly to the color of blood can take a while to click. I love it for that reason. 

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Dime9878 OP April 21st

I should have scrapped the poem it’s not really good and now I am regretting that I posted it

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Dime9878 OP April 21st

i am really disappointed about this poem it’s just stupid poem I really hate it it’s not good enough

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@Dime9878

No, no, I was thinking it was about something deep, like an addiction. Good job! <3

User Profile: braveNest6406
braveNest6406 April 22nd

@Dime9878 its genuinely good, i hope you keep it here on the forum, its worth giving space just as much as every other poem you wrote on here.


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User Profile: Amanda84
Amanda84 April 22nd

@Dime9878


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She gave it the “seal of approval”. ;) <3

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