Some Days
This is just another poem I’ve written recently. I don’t think it’s so great :') but feedback and/or constructive criticism is welcome.
‘Some Days’
Some days I need a friend
To sit with me in the darkness,
As we rest in the calm of the starry night sky,
As we watch the graceful dance of the starry sea
Some days I need a friend
To point out those stars to me.
Some days I need a friend
To show me
Things I can’t see in myself,
To whisper some of the truest words ever spoken:
‘You are enough, just as you are.’
Some days I need a friend
To nod at what I feel each day
To squeeze my hand and tell me,
‘It’s okay to feel this way.’
Some days I need a friend
To tell me I mean something to this earth
To tell me of the great gap I’d leave behind
If I would disappear.
Yet other days I need a friend
Who needs me as much as I need them.
Tagging @HealingTalk and @FloortheRabbit
@LoveMyMoonflowers 😥 that bought a year to my eye. It was beautifully written. But so sad, it makes me questio n, with so many people in the world, how come there are so many lonely people😞 it's very sad to think about. I hope and wish one day youll, get a companion a best friend. And tiny whispers to you "you are worth so much, you are more than good enough and everything will be ok" ❤ I love you
@Tinywhisper11
*huggles lola bean if okay* 💜
@LoveMyMoonflowers hugggs back ❤❤❤squeezes you tightly q
@Tinywhisper11 I have no idea why I typed the letter q at the end 😂😂 sorry
@Tinywhisper11
aww nu it's okies <3 it happens sometimes
@LoveMyMoonflowers Moon this is amazing 💙 Some days we all need a friend
@mytwistedsoul
aww thank you so so much, soul buddy :'3 that means so so much to me. tbh i feel that, many times, you've been that friend to me. *hugs if okay* <3
Oh oh oh… damn!
You couldn’t have put my thoughts in a better way! Such a beautiful piece which touches on a lot of emotions.
I genuinely think that it’s the true mark of a relationship when the two can sit together doing nothing. That’s one of the purest metric I would use.
Please write more! I’m grateful that you tagged me here! Thank you so much!
@FloortheRabbit
thank you so much 💜 i am glad to hear you enjoyed the poem. i'll definitely be writing more <3 thank you so so much 💜
@LoveMyMoonflowers
This is sooo beautifully written, so polished!
It flows naturally and it's a pleasure to read.
Very moving too.
It conveys clearly the idea and evokes strongly the emotion of longing we all have for someone who cheers us up when we are down, who understands us, maybe even better than ourselves. Who validates and accepts us exactly as we are. Who supports us when we need emotional connection. Who reassures us how valuable we are. And also makes us feel needed.
That longing "I need" seems to imply you don't have people in your life who cover all those needs. So the poem has a melancholic tone. You could say "I need water and air to survive" and you have them, there is no contradiction. It remains open. But the feeling is that the need is not covered.
It subtly conveys a sense of wisdom in knowing very clearly what you need in life. There is no confusion here. And not even a drop of resentment.
There is courage in expressing without any shame whatsoever that you do need some things from others, that you might not have at the moment.
Something interesting is that though the poem has a mild sad tonality, it feels hopeful to me, and not depressing at all, maybe because knowing exactly what you need can help you focus and thus make most probable that you will get it.
In any case, the poem is beautiful, both aesthetically and in its message, it's moving, and it touched my heart. It left me thinking too.
A very well crafted piece, beautiful, relevant and emotive.
You are really good at this!
Congratulations on a great poem!
Keep bringing your wonderful writings!
@HealingTalk
@LoveMyMoonflowers
Thank you, Ni!
Yes, I enjoyed your poem very much. It's interesting how my views might give you new perspectives on your own work. Like a short dialogue we have.
You are very good at writing. Like. most of us can learn to sing, but there are people blessed with a beautiful, rich voice, perfect pitch and a sense of rhythm and musicality. You have been blessed with these talents for Poetry.
I do try to stay present in Cups. Sometimes being present is all I can do, but might be enough. Also just your presence is enough, you don't need to do anything special to support others. You have cheered me up so many times! Every upvote from you brings a smile to my face. And your comments are always very heartwarming. It's people like you that make this place so special to be and come back again and again.
Sending you much love and best wishes! 💜 💜 💜
Let's stay in touch!
Marcelo.
@HealingTalk
@LoveMyMoonflowers
You are welcome, Ni! 💜
@LoveMyMoonflowers
so beautiful!
@annapaviacounselor
thank you so so much 🥺💜
@LoveMyMoonflowers This sounded very nice. I completely relate. Thanks for sharing it. I admire your talent in expression. I hope you can write many more good poems in the future.
@alicetang07
Thank you so much! :3