Light
You shine like a natural light
glistening on the horizon
awaking the world
softly, surely
brushing warmth
through the souls of others
while my light is man made
provides comfort in solemn dark
only while you are gone
i am meant to be turned
off
on
off
on
at the will of others
while you come in your own time
welcomed, still.
@twerp This is beautifully written, though it made me feel a little sad. I love how you contrast the natural light with the man-made one—it really highlights that feeling of being needed only when it's convenient, versus a light that shines freely and without conditions. I’ve never thought about that contrast in such a way—the freedom, the limits, the conditions. It’s such a brilliant metaphor. You’ve captured something so delicate and true in these lines.
@azurePond
i always love seeing your reply’s to my work 🤍
I wrote this about how people discriminate and unwelcome things/people that do almost the exact same thing because they come from a different source. Being a backup when that certain person is there, and being discarded when they come back is something I’ve experienced and struggled with. You’re a writer I insanely look up to btw lol I love your work. If you have the time (not forced to do) can you read some of my later work and provide feedback on how to make it sound better? If not that’s okay! ☺️. Again, thanks for the kind words I appreciate them so much.
@twerp Thank you so much for your kind words. I’m truly humbled by your praise. I’m not sure I deserve such high compliments, but your support means a lot and motivates me to write even better poems. I’d absolutely love to read your work and offer feedback!
@twerp
Okay I wanna preface with; this is another great piece.
Yeeesssh do I not like how this puts me in my feelings right now. It felt like this was speaking directly to my current kind of issue. Haha, oh boy.
Well done, again.
@Dingleboop
why are all the writers I look up to posting on my work. 😭😂
Im not sure if you read, but one of my biggest goals now is working on font and punctuation to incorporate more pace, emotion, and visual effects to my poetry after reading your work..probably should have tagged you earlier. 🤔
@twerp
Firstly, you inspire me as well. I look up to you, as well.
Whatever direction you are taking your writing that leaves you feeling the most accomplished is where should go; in my humble opinion. With that said; we grow when we challenge ourselves, and even in the span of days; you've grown.