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Im broken and hurt I don’t know my worth 

the words I’ve heard all my life 

They’re Constantly flowing through my mind 

I try and try to block it out 

but then the silent tears come out 

the days I dread and hated the most 

my most vulnerable times but I’m fine. 

Perfection is what we chase 

but will we ever win the race 

or time always be there to remind us 

of everything we try to leave behind us 

my mind goes 10000 miles an hour 

with too many airplanes up above 

the noise so loud I can’t hear the wind 

the noise so loud I can’t think 

the noise so loud I just act  out 

Will i ever get to hear the wind again? 

The beautiful song it sings to the breeze 

will I ever see the true beauty of the sunset

or will I forever wish I was with the stars. 

@Firecub2802

A very warm welcome to you, and thank you for sharing your poems. They are both so sad for the emotions they convey and yet so different. Your first is laced with a sort of defiance, a triumph against adversity. Yet the second feels so much more defeated and ground down. I found it interesting how the first is in third person, whilst with the second you chose to speak in the first person. It certainly makes the second one feel much more personal. When viewing the poems side by side I get the sense that the first is a bit like us seeing the mask of the narrator of the second poem; we see what the author wants us to see, and/or how they wish to be. Yet the second poem lets us peek beneath the surface and see all the turmoil and vulnerability. I think that is what makes both of them very sad.

Again, thank you for sharing them both with us all. Looking forward to seeing more of your poems.