The Murder of a Rose
Trigger Warning: This poem contains a gruesome onscreen murder of a rose and allusions to hitting a rabbit with a hammer. Rest assured, no roses or rabbits were harmed in the making of this poem—I'm not a serial killer! This is purely a work of fiction exploring the theme of corruption.
In twilight’s grip, the garden breathes,
The lady in the black leans close, whispers,
“Behold this rose—
I’m going to pull apart its petals,
One by one.”
I halted her fingers, heart racing.
“Why this madness?” I dared to ask.
“Beauty will always be killed.
It’s the law of the night,” she replied,
“Like a soft, sweet rabbit,
You’d want to kiss it with a hammer.
To cherish the lovely, you must trample it down.”
Her laughter flickered like fireflies.
“What’s gained from destruction?” I questioned,
“Why break what could bloom?”
“Love is to shatter, to dance in despair,
To cradle the fragile, then leave it bare.”
But she drifted away,
As if debate were futile.
Relieved, I watched the rose remain unscathed,
In the early light of morning,
Thriving, pure, bright—
Each day, a silent testament.
Yet, shadows crept in,
Why can’t I sway free?
Why does sunlight crown the rose with rainbows
While casting only shadows upon me?
So, in the dead of night,
When the moon was cloaked in clouds,
I slipped through the garden,
I plucked the rose—
My hands bled on her thorns,
Red drops mingling with earth.
I threw it down,
And began to stomp…
Thud
Squish
Groan
Petals crushed beneath my fury,
Blending blood, tears, and dirt.
When the clouds parted,
Moonlight revealed the crime—
A horror to behold.
I kneeled in the dirt,
And my fingers tried to scratch out the petals
My nails broke,
Only dirt, blood and grime remained
Cold against my hot skin.
I looked towards the house, the window—
My vision blurred, but I saw
The lady in the black veil, watching me,
A crooked smile twisting her lips.
The chill breeze whispered in her voice,
“See how the pure is tainted;
It is the way of the night.”
@azurePond
What an eery and spine-tingling piece this is. It oozes with gothic atmosphere from it's content through to it's beautiful at at times horrific metaphor's and simile; I especially liked "Her laughter flickered like fireflies.", that is just excellent!
And then you deliver the rhyming couplet that stands a prophetic warning from the lady in black “Love is to shatter, to dance in despair, To cradle the fragile, then leave it bare.”: We share in the narrator's relief of the saved roe, only to realise with creeping doom that it was but a temporary reprieve.
It is awesome how you derive such pathos for the inanimate, and leave us guessing/suspecting to the veiled allegory of this macabre tale. Very Poe. I loved it.
@BastionKnight "Very Poe"? Really? You have made my day.. no wait.. my month.. nope.. you have made my whole life! Thank you so much😭.. I have been consuming a lot of goth stuff lately... And, happy early Halloween ! *Gonna print your comment and frame it*
Also, I will cite this on my resume too, if that is allowed.
@azurePond
*smiles*
@azurePond
There was so much depth to this. I felt ants crawling my legs. (So much so I decided to wear a jacket.) Eh!! That tingling feeling you get when you read a masterpiece...I was like "no! the rabbit!" and "Aww! The rose!" but I knew what this poem represented was but a sad truth! Especially the last two lines- There is so much more layers to those words! I loved it very much, really!
Are you sure..?[the serial killer thing...*wink wink*-no offence!]
@wIthpeACE Omg—first of all... apologies for this really late reply! 😅 Hahaha I promise I’m not a serial killer… just a poet with an overactive imagination and a dark sense of metaphor—wink wink. But seriously... thank you so much for this comment. It means a lot that the imagery landed that deeply (even if it summoned phantom ants!) I’m really glad the layers came through for you.