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User Profile: determinedSea4370
determinedSea4370 January 8th, 2025

The hope is lost

to the allure of routine-

to roll up with fanfare

to a predatory house

with its promise of unwinding 

swilled in so many bottles.

I am a crime with no witnesses

and it's lonely.

It's all too easy.

To smother the woman before possibilties become a sealed fate

to drown the girl in melancholy-

all these weaknesses dowsed in the perfume of poetry.

And I just want and want and want

I don't need food

I need my head in your lap

fingers in my hair, the sunlight.

It's cold in the driveway

I've been abandoned

and betrayed by strangers-

all of us silly humans

screaming into the void.

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User Profile: BastionKnight
BastionKnight January 9th, 2025

@determinedSea4370

A very sad and passionate cry. I really liked the line "All these weaknesses dowsed in the perfume of poetry", and found it very poignant. It is such a harsh lens that the narrating voice uses upon themselves that i feel very sorry for them.

Thank you for sharing this.

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User Profile: determinedSea4370
determinedSea4370 OP January 9th, 2025

@BastionKnight And thanks for the thoughtful review. I wrote this while procrastinating to go inside the house, tapping away on my phone in the car while I froze my butt off lol

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User Profile: BastionKnight
BastionKnight January 9th, 2025

@determinedSea4370

Well it seems the muse struck you, so keeping tapping away *smiles*

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