indigo love
Let me find you.
Not the yellow
sunshine bright
slip a smile
joyful while
you.
Let me find the blue
seaside dream
you let blew
hidden wonder
you.
Let me read your
stories
you keep away
from the public crew.
Let me paint
your life
into mine
live inside your
hue.
Let me see
your true colors
indigo blue,
why won’t you let me
confine in you?
@twerp Wow, this is such a beautiful poem—simple yet elegant. ( I’m no literary critic, but as a lover of poetry,I will appreciate the way it is written ) . The repetition of “Let me find you” really stands out to me. It adds this sense of yearning, almost like a quiet plea - and that really pulls the reader in. The imagery is so vivid too—“yellow sunshine bright” and “blue seaside dream”—
I also love how you play with light and dark “yellow sunshine bright” and “indigo blue.” It gives the poem a bit of duality, as if there’s a hidden side to the person that’s not fully revealed, even though the speaker longs to understand them completely. The symbolism of colour—like “your true colours”—makes me think about how we all have parts of ourselves that we keep hidden from others.
The rhythm is really smooth too, with rhyming sections like “smile/while” and “hue/you.” It gives the poem this gentle flow, almost like a soft conversation. There’s a beautiful balance between asking and longing which makes the theme of wanting to connect with someone feel so genuine and personal.
Overall- it’s such a captivating piece. The way you blend imagery, rhythm, and emotion is spot on. Keep writing!
@azurePond
thank you 🙁🤍. I might cry you’re so sweet. 🥲
I can’t thank you enough for reading my writing and providing feedback, it really helps me see what I’m good at and what I need to improve. (P.S there is anything you think I can improve in please let me know). Lol thx for basically being my poetry mentor
@twerp Please don't cry--- I really hate making people cry. But seriously - you're welcome. Reading your poems was never a chore or a task for me—I love poetry, and I love your poems. I don’t consider myself qualified to be a poetry mentor but thank you for the high praise. Everyone who writes poetry will tell you there’s always room for improvement, not just in poetry but in everything (you know, life in general)
I don’t want to give you a specific direction or say things in a way that feels like I'm dictating your style. You already have a unique poetic voice—just keep working with it and tweaking it as you go. I already love how you take simple, everyday images and elevate them, showing them in a new light or colour. (See what I did there? Your use of light and colour imagery is so good.)
Maybe now, you can experiment with punctuation, varying line lengths, or even explore new themes and emotions. Try subverting them or mixing contradictory ideas together. There are so many ways to experiment. Art is all about experimentation, even more so than science (if I disappear- it’s because practical physicists and biotech engineers have kidnapped me).
I'm really humbled that you look up to my work, but I’d suggest you read more than just mine. Explore diverse poetry—read from 7cups, ***, newspapers, or people's journals (with permission, of course). Dive into poetry from around the world, especially translations—think Wisława Szymborska, Anna Akhmatova, Kamala Das, Khalil Gibran, Rumi, Pablo Neruda, Sylvia Plath, Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allan Poe, even haikus. Read from different cultures and different eras. Everyone has something unique to teach you. After all, poetry is about experience and emotion, so read to gather those experiences and emotions.
And most importantly—write. Write and keep writing to polish your work. That’s my humble advice, though I’d rather you see it as a friendly suggestion - like a classmate sharing what she does for her coursework.
@azurePond oh they censored ins-ta-gr@m
@azurePond
Thank you for the advice. 🤍
I just recently started writing consistently a few years ago so I’m rather new (14 now) but I’ve always seen poetry in the world. I’m excited to try out punctuation and different styles and emotions like you suggested!! One of my biggest goals right now is working on using fonts and style to incorporate pace and mood. Also, I actually have read a few of those writers you’ve recommended. Sylvia Plath, Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allen Poe (Tell tale heart 🙏) and such. Although my favorite is Virginia Woolf. I’m looking forward to reading the ones I have not. Also I applaud your humbleness lol! You’re a great poet and an aspiration to many writers, especially young ones like me. Thanks for replying (no more tears haha)
@twerp It’s incredible that you’ve been writing consistently for a few years now—that’s such a solid foundation, especially at your age! And I love that you’re thinking about how fonts and style can influence pace and mood. That’s such a smart way to add depth to your work and really connect with your reader.
Virginia Woolf! She’s one of my favorites too. (Just dropping some personal lore here!) I’ve actually named the folder where I keep my poetry and musings “A Room of One’s Own.” I know it’s not a poem, but it feels like a seminal piece to me—one that delves into the importance of having space and freedom for artistic expression.
Once again....Thank you so much for your kind words (honestly, I’m not great at accepting compliments)—they really mean a lot ( I feel like a broken record... repeating the same words). And as a Gen Z, you’ve officially made me feel old... haha... But it also took me back to my own teenage years (which, let's be real, I’d rather forget in some ways... but there were definitely some good poems during that time too). My work wasn’t as polished as yours back then, but oh, I was definitely writing!
But seriously, your passion and openness to learning are what will make your poetry shine. Keep reading, writing, and exploring—there’s always something new to discover in the world of writing and I’m sure you’ll achieve everything you’re aiming for with your poems. 🤍
