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i wrote this poem and don’t know if it’s any good? feedback welcome but please don’t be mean 🙏🏻

User Profile: alexahelp5078
alexahelp5078 August 25th, 2023

Pretty People in Porcelain Masks

So many pretty porcelain faces

All perfectly sculpted for pretentious pretenses

Beauty is categorized and labeled

For what can be known to the individual but not the society

Gem eyes that skim the surface

And silver tongues for spewing dazzling lies

Each conversation is a dance

An intricate waltz in between insensitive truths and around opinionated arguments

Step left

Avoid offending your dance partner

Step right

Hold your perfect porcelain smile

Twirl

Fake laugh at unfunny jokes

Bow

Part with polite and political posturing

Find a new dance partner

Knives are hidden behind backs

Venom is held in closed mouths

Lies are disguised and sold as truths

Difference is a weakness

Cracked masks are ugly

Bare faces unthinkably hideous

Judgements must be made in seconds

Skim read personalities

Swipe left or swipe right on friendships

Rinse and repeat

Excellence above all

Everything must be exact

Black camera eyes exist on every surface

Nothing is secret, nothing is personal

Hollowed out husks aren’t light enough

One-inch waists aren’t thin enough

Bulging muscles aren’t big enough

Perfect porcelain masks aren’t beautiful enough

For when everyone is beautiful, nobody is

Standardized beauty becomes boring and drab

Behind each perfect porcelain mask is a person

Whose tired eyes

And world-weary mind

Yearns to be free

Suppressed personalities and ambitions rage against porcelain prisons

And sometimes they win

Masks crack and fall away

Revealing luscious colors and stunning imperfections

Uniform personalities fade to quirks and captivating individualism

Sculpted bodies change into varied masterpieces

Laughs become thick and hearty and wonderfully different

All imperfections accentuate exquisite features

For beauty is often not born of perfection

But rather an amalgamation of imperfections in just the right way

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User Profile: Start101
Start101 August 27th, 2023

@alexahelp5078

An impressive reflection of a critically inspired mind seeking to express itself creatively ...

Very well done, congratulations Alexa

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alexahelp5078 OP August 28th, 2023

thanks so much for the feedback!! 💙💙

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sociablePeach7626 August 27th, 2023

@alexahelp5078 very good poem! I like this form of self-expression. Great job.

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alexahelp5078 OP August 28th, 2023

thanks so much i really appreciate ittt 🩵🩵

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